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Post by reitgerte on Sept 30, 2012 9:03:25 GMT -8
+ Pending Hello and welcome to the site, Jazz! Before you can start RPing, there's a few things I'm curious to know about pockey.
Firstly, what is she ill with? You mention that she was in the hospital a few days, and now she's at home and can't go to school. Despite that, though, we don't see much of how it affects her. You mention that she's bad enough people think she's going to die, but she seems to spend her time eating junk food and doing completely normal things. How does being sick affect her, beyond the fact that she doesn't go to school?
Secondly, DO is played one of two ways. Either you get a personal pod, which is extremely expensive and only the filthy rich can do, or you go to a shop and use their pods. If she's sick enough she can't go to school, public pods aren't an option, but there's no mention of a personal pod, and it's not the sort of casual investment you'd make.
Thirdly, I'm just not seeing much of who pockey is. She's sick, yes, and at risk of dying, but I don't know what she's like beyond that. Maybe a third blog entry, talking about friends and family, her reactions to them, and whatnot?
When you've editted, please post to let us know.
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